Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a large city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.
It is critically important that all children be raised in a supportive and healthy environment. In my opinion, it is more advantageous to raise young people in countryside, than to raise them in a large city. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, people in countryside have lot of planned activities in terms of sports. Availability of space in rural side enables children to play sports or any other physical activity for fitness. Otherwise, people usually in city have less space to carry out physical activities which leads them to play video games. Uncaring about physical health is most deleterious to mankind. My nephew’s experience is a compelling example of this. He is born and brought up in countryside. He has been playing lot of sports from very early age which made him fit and healthy. He doesn’t like to play video games and encourages us to make plan for outdoor activities. This behavior is much needed in today’s world to avoid clumsiness and banality of indoor games.
Secondly, exploring nature in countryside makes it more attractive and difficult to depart from there. Oxygen is pure and fresh in rural areas as compared to city. Due to abundance of private vehicles, there has been rise in pollution which makes it detrimental for people to live. Cutting out trees and making huge commercial buildings has led to drop of oxygen in large cities. For example, there are lot of health problems in city side due to increase in development of tall buildings and cutting off trees. People in city areas haven’t notice such small problems which is crucial and must be acknowledged to prevent this.
There are few advantages for children to grow up in a large city. However, I prefer children to grow in countryside to explore nature and its benefits. Avoiding health problems in future and indulging in outdoor activities are the apogee of living in countryside.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92987804878 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77404681605 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542682926829 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.4457931284 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.619047619 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61904761905 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163428881029 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482059050256 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532461390556 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10977553225 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440932181305 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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