Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an ongoing dilemma that whether people should choose the jobs matching with the professions of their parents or not. I strongly agree with the idea that kids should opt for the jobs that are congruent to the occupations of their parents. There are three possible reasons behind my position which I will elaborate in this writing.
To begin with, performing a job similar to my parents will be less daunting for me. It is because to the fact that I already have enough knowledge about the work from my parents and so I can cope up with the tasks quite easily and comfortably. For example, I have chosen teaching as my profession and it is worth to state that my mother was a teacher as well. From the very early of my childhood, I was well familiarized with the responsibilities related to teaching. I know how to deal with the students, how to motivate them to be a good learner as well as a good human being. In this connection. I feel very relaxed to deliver my lectures since I have learned it from my mother. However, one of my colleagues who was also appointed as a faculty in the same school, could not survive like me. He often struggled with class management systems and was very frustrated with the job. Later he told me that neither his father nor his mother was involved in teaching profession. This is the reason for what he had to struggle a lot. Finally, he left the job with utter dissatisfaction. However, after my suggestion to be a banker like his father, my ex-colleague is now doing very well in his job. He finds all the relevant supports and information from his father. Therefore, in order to make the professional life smooth and hassle free, we should choose a job like our parents.
Secondly, in order to make our parents happy, we should choose the occupation similar to them. Parents actually want to see the reflection of their hard works and dedication in their children. Therefore, whenever their children prefer a job similar to them, it creates a positive feeling in them. For example, my mother never forces me to be a teacher directly. However, her speech and dreams reflect that she actually wants to see the replicate of herself in me. Keeping that in mind, I dedicate myself in teaching and when my mother first heard about my appointment, she started crying and cuddled me like a baby. From my own life experience, I am able to learn that, it is very tough to put a smile on the parent's face; since it makes them happy, every children should try to do a work according to their parents.
Last but not the least, self recognition from the community is easy to avail if one selects a job similar to his parent's job. Undoubtedly, people want recognition, appreciation from others in their job lives. It makes them motivated and inspired. If a child does a job similar to his parents, society will give him positive reinforcement and recognition. He will be appreciated because of choosing the right profession since his parents have a special value in the society. Therefore, the social community will treat him as the ideal child of his parents and value his work with due respect. In contrast, whenever a child chooses a profession other than that, society people may criticize him for his job. Eventually, it will demotivate him in his job life and he will be obsessed with his career. Therefore, in order to have the social recognition, there is not alternative but choosing a profession similar to our parents.
In the end, children should certainly look for a job similar to their parent's jobs. It will make their job life easy and also put a smile in their parents' face. Besides, it will give them social recognition early as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to teach'.
Suggestion: to teach
...d comfortably For example I have chosen teaching as my profession and it is worth to sta...
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Line 5, column 423, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... reflect that she actually wants to see the replicate of herself in me Keeping that in mind I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in contrast, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 106.0 43.0788530466 246% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2975.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 654.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54892966361 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58120325366 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400611620795 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 944.1 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 654.0 20.1344086022 3248% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2975.0 100.406767564 2963% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 654.0 20.6045352989 3174% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 168.0 5.45110844103 3082% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38845442085 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.38845442085 0.076458572812 508% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277053488195 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05633204366 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 327.0 11.7677419355 2779% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -575.41 58.1214874552 -990% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 256.0 10.1575268817 2520% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.59 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 38.56 8.01818996416 481% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 10.002688172 530% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 263.6 10.0537634409 2622% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 53.0 10.247311828 517% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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