Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Todays, due to high technologies and internet our world became global village because of connection between countries and people. So, any events that occur around the world will affect to on our lives. May be some people prefer to do not be aware of about news because they are sometimes upsetting, but I believe that it is important to know what happens around the world.
First of all, the main reason that I think we should know what happens in the world is that we can prepare ourselves much more better for what will going on in the future, and we can make the best decision. All of us know that what happens in the word will influences in our country and our daily lives. For example, there are wars around the word in some countries, and many countries are contributing in these wars. Indeed, these wars will cause currency value in some countries decreases dramatically. So, when people know that what is happening beside them, they immediately try to make decision about their jobs, money and any things that is related to their life. I remember last year we decided to have a trip abroad my country, but we had to change our money six month before our trip because of starting a war in our adjacency. Actually we knew this war would affect to our currency value, so we could change more money for our trip. Therefore, it is necessary to know what is going on in the world to be able to make the best decision.
Secondly, information always helps us to be aware of world news. Actually, this is vital to know what happens in this global village. I mean events always are experiments that we can use them to cease same events in the future that they are occurring today. For instance, a huge earthquake occurred in a country near my country about one month ago and thousands of people died. That was terrible news, but it caused my government decided to set some strong rules for buildings to prevent same event in my country in future. Indeed, my country is on some faults. In my opinion, being informed about world events and news helps us to decide for future and prevent same occurrences.
For summary, I believe that it is important to know what happens around the word, because, it helps us to prepare ourselves better for future, make the best decisions and prevent same bad events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... world will affect to on our lives. May be some people prefer to do not be aware o...
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Line 2, column 123, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...d is that we can prepare ourselves much more better for what will going on in the future, a...
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Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...urselves much more better for what will going on in the future, and we can make the b...
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Line 2, column 257, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'influence'
Suggestion: influence
...know that what happens in the word will influences in our country and our daily lives. For...
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Line 2, column 771, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...try, but we had to change our money six month before our trip because of starting a w...
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Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ngs to prevent same event in my country in future. Indeed, my country is on some faults. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57627118644 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37720858589 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44794188862 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5782327663 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4736842105 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7368421053 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198094103044 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717534627309 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606223155503 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141081271196 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630423965851 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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