Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Todays, due to high technologies and internet our world became global village because of connection between countries and people. Hence, any events that occur around the world will affect our lives. May be some people prefer to do not be aware of news because they are sometimes upsetting, but I believe that it is remarkable to know what happens around the world.
First of all, the significant reason that I think we should know what happens in the world is that we can prepare ourselves much more better for what will go on in the future, and we can make the best decision. All of us know that what happens in the world will influence in our country and our daily lives. For example, there are wars around the world in some countries, and many countries are contributing in these wars. Indeed, these wars will cause currency value in some countries decreases dramatically. Therefore, when someone knows that what is happening beside him, he immediately tries to make decision about his jobs, money and any things that are related to his life. I remember last year we decided to have a trip abroad my country, but we had to change our money six month before our trip because of starting a war in our adjacency. As a matter of fact, we knew this war would effect on our currency value, thus we could change more money for our trip. Therefore, it is fundamentally to know what is going on in the world to be able to make the favorable decision.
Follow the same reason, information always helps us to be aware of world news. Actually, this is crucial to know what happens in this global village. I mean events always are experiments that we can use them to cease same events in the future that they are occurring today. For instance, a huge earthquake occurred in a country near my country about one month ago and thousands of people died. That was terrible news, but it caused my government has decided to set some strong rules for buildings to prevent same event in my country in future. Indeed, my country is on some faults. In my opinion, being informed about world events and news helps us to decide for future and prevent same unpleasant occurrences.
For summary, I believe that it is brilliant to know what happens around the word, because, it helps us to belay ourselves better for future, make the best decisions and prevent same unfavorable events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...nd the world will affect our lives. May be some people prefer to do not be aware o...
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Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...d is that we can prepare ourselves much more better for what will go on in the future, and ...
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Line 2, column 781, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...try, but we had to change our money six month before our trip because of starting a w...
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Line 2, column 891, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... matter of fact, we knew this war would effect on our currency value, thus we could ch...
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Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ngs to prevent same event in my country in future. Indeed, my country is on some faults. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, as a matter of fact, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64439140811 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4641447115 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470167064439 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5615761842 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.421052632 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18965561429 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700058340885 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555860163473 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125526664063 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507752225376 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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