Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. Which view do you agree with, and why?
Nowadays, due to complicated conditions of the world, parents have to treat their children to prepare them for responsibility. The significant key of achievement is the ability of teamworking. Although some parents are persuited giving money to children instead of doing home staffs, I believe that children should be participated in doing home works without money inspiration.
First and foremost, being responsible and activated for own sake is the first reason why I deny giving money to children. Parents who think should they pay cost of working in home to their children, actually they are teach them that there is specific price for anything. Moreover, when children grow up, they expect anyone to pay them for anything that they do, and this treatment would cause tremendous difficulties for these kinds of persons, because they did not learn that part times sacrifices are necessary without expecting money. For instance, I remember last summer we had decided to paint our house, so we called out a brilliant painter. After ending the painting, he decided to paint a wall that was not in the agreement. As a matter of fact, his personality had shaped very exclusively that responsibility sense was his motivation that should he finished the residual spaces without expecting money. Thus, is it necessary for youths to learn that money is not the only inspiration for corporating
Secondly, having communication and being good team working is the another important reason why I refuse giving money to young persons. Actually, when younger individuals are inspired by money, they would be شرطی, and the spectacular feature of humanity, that is called communication, will die in them. those learned to do some specific tasks by taking money, and when the money run out, they stop cooraporation. persons who have weakness in connection, they are محکوم to failed in this world, because the communication is the success key. As a personal experience, I had a friend who was professor assistant in university. One day the university decided to has a scientific trip. Most professors with their assistants took part in this trip. He did not do anything because there was no grant for exploration in this trip, so that day was awful for him because of having no communication and corporation with another ones.
In summary, due to this world conditions should parents ask their children to do home works with out expecting money because, youths need to learn money is not the only motivation, having ability to communication and sense of responsibility and sacrifice.
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...sense of responsibility and sacrifice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in summary, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93868173509 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0877304109 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.555555556 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243789364511 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777045496985 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959519306386 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196528581555 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943928064066 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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