Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Development of technology and the population explosion have led to an increase in the number of areas that the governments should manage and direct. While a proportion of people maintain that the governors ought to invest in a higher-quality public transportation system, I hold a different view, believing that the increased accessibility to the Internet plays a far more significant role in the advancement of society. This essay will explore a couple of reasons supporting my perspective in the following paragraphs.
First of all, owing to the outstanding opportunities offered by the advent of the Internet, a large number of tasks can be performed at home, resulting in less required commutations. To put it in other words, nowadays, people can take advantage of the Internet and carry out various pieces of work without leaving their seats. For instance, several financial related tasks, which were not plausible to be accomplished without proceeding to the banks on foot or by contrasting ways of transportation, are carried out through the websites or exceptionally beneficial applications on people's smartphones. Besides, with the advent of the Internet, novel types of jobs and approaches to complete a particular project has been introduced to the public. These occupations include the immensely sought-after telecommuting professions that serve people with more effortless ways of finishing a duty.
Secondly, the Internet has offered multiple remarkable opportunities including the free tutoring that can help people to have a job more easily, which means Internet access is advantageous for the government in several aspects. Thus, the policymakers are able to solve a handful of related problems while they only pay money for one of them. I assume that a personal example can shed light on this notion. A couple of years ago, when the Internet was extremely new in my country, I took advantage of it and learn French. Hence, I could find a job as a French translator for a film company in my town, which was responsible to provide French movies with subtitles for the public. It was distinctly worthwhile for me since I could have a part-time job for which I was not expected to travel in the city owing to the online theme of the work and earn a small amount of money. Thus, I benefitted from the Internet for another purpose that was profitable for the government, too.
On the whole, taking all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that governors should spend money on Internet accessibility rather than public transportation. Not only can it help the government to decrease the need for commutation, but it also can help the governors to take a series of advantages by investing in only one area.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... offered by the advent of the Internet, a large number of tasks can be performed at home, resulti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, first of all, in other words, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2304.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13140311804 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12760543616 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543429844098 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3878683362 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.529411765 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4117647059 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215905096997 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675737282716 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519291653254 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130214774093 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344155664174 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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