Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debates over what governments should spend their money on. Some people believe that public transportation should be the major concern of the governments, others would disagree. In my opinion, governments should invest money in developing and improving Internet access for the following reasons.
First, with the advent of the Internet, people's life have become easier in terms of information access and ways of its obtaining. Obviously, until as late as the Internet appeared in our lives, people had to spend a lot of time in libraries in search of information they needed, read all the materials they found and extract relevant pieces of information. When the Internet was invented, it was slow and it took a lot of time to establish a connection, to wait for a page to load and files to download. For example, when I was a nine-grade school student, I had a lot of subjects to study and all teachers constantly forced us to make reports on a variety of topics. The sheer idea of interacting with the Internet made me furious because I knew that it was slow. But a few years later, our government started funding the Internet improvement, after which doing researches have become a pleasant activity because I did not have to expend a lot of time on it.
Second, the development of the Internet allows many people to work remotely from their homes. Previously, with bad Internet connection, it seemed unrealistic that somebody would be able to do their jobs remotely. Nowadays, it had become possible due to the fact that our government adopt measures designed to enhance the Internet abilities. For example, my brother is a programmer and he works for the famous company, Google, but to see him going out of his home is a rare occasion. This gives him a great opportunity to spend more time with his family. Moreover, he does not have to spend money for commuting around the city to get to his working place, which is another way of saving money. Obviously, besides the opportunity to work remotely, he does not have to be worried about locomotion costs.
In conclusion, wise governmental spendings on Internet access improvement will be only beneficial for people in terms of lowering their expenditure and the ability to work remotely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... fact that our government adopt measures designed to enhance the Internet abiliti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89119170984 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81025398326 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544041450777 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7135068932 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.058823529 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7058823529 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213198472895 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717500402101 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594244048934 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142695353396 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377039906473 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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