Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Nowadays, companies use different ways in order to sell their products to customers. One of these ways is advertising, in which companies and fairs pay some amount of money to advertisers who are specialized in advertising in a variety technique which attract customers' attentions. In this line of thought, some people believe that most advertisements make products seem better than they really are, while many others hold another view and do not endorse this point of view. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, advertisers exaggerate the quality of products in order to increase the sell rate of them. Indeed, recently established companies are not known to customers, and thus they invest a great deal of money in advertising their products in different ways so as to become well-known and their sell rate is increased. For the sake of this purpose, advertisers, even though the products do not have high quality in the earlier time of establishment of companies, exaggerate the quality and features of products. When people are exposed to these advertisements, they unintentionally accept these positive recommendations about those products and in this situation, they will be more likely to buy them. Continuing this act by advertisers and consequently increase in sell rate of products make them well-known products among customers, while they are not as good as they are in reality.
Secondly, some advertisements use celebrities to attract people's attentions and advertise their products, which increases the rate sell of those products. To be more specific, celebrities are well-known throughout the societies, and most of people know them and they are popular among individuals, especially young people. Therefore, these famous people are roll model of many people in each society, and if they behave in a certain way or use some special equipment or product, their followers tend to imitate their behavior and actions and use the same products they use. In this vein, when business owners use these celebrities to advertise their products, people will be more likely to buy their products although those products might not be perfect without drawbacks, or they be low-quality products. As a result, by using famous and popular individuals, advertisers make a good impression on people about certain products and increase the sell rate of them, even thought they might not be worth their costs.
To conclude, many advertisements make products more interesting and attractive to customers although they are not as good as they seem. Not only do advertisers exaggerate in their advertisements about the quality and features of products, but they also use famous celebrities in their advertisements to improve the sell rate of low-quality products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 264, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...tising their products in different ways so as to become well-known and their sell rate i...
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Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ell-known throughout the societies, and most of people know them and they are popular among in...
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Line 4, column 258, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...features of products, but they also use famous celebrities in their advertisements to improve the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29735682819 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03121556006 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429515418502 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.2302702153 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.3125 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.375 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25360927714 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103919519897 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667309970948 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19045958221 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448754819514 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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