Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Adverstisement of any product is done in order to improve the sales of a company. Some people are inclined towards the attitude that items should be sold in the original form and all benefits and disadvantages and customer must know how is the product in real, whereas, others hold the opposite perspective. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of advertising. I personally, though, believe that the ads make things more attractive. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that advertisement is a marketing strategy to increase the demand of product. If the stuff is not looks good nobody will buy it. To exemplify, five years back I was the employee of the industry who makes advertisement for all kinds and earns a huge amount by manfacturers. One day we got a sample of the machinary for which we have to make the ad and we had to tell all the positive side and the cameras we uses is of high quality. Then I realized the company is making products beautiful and useful which increases the demand, although, that products was not good enough according to its price because I have seen it in reality and knows all the disadvantages too that we don't show on ads. As a results, people buy things they saw on ads or heard of it. Therefore, this example illustrates that always looks for the original things first instead of believing on advertisement.
Secondly, advertisement are made to focus on the specific population. Different products have different target areas in order to achieve the purpose of the advertisement. It is not all about making a product looks better it's about to make profit. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. My son saw an ad of candy in between the cartoon series on television and one day we went to the store and he saw the same candy and insisted to get it. At that time I notice how the advertising companies are focusing on their target. Thus, this experience taught me that the ads have a influence on childrens.
In light of the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that advertisement makes the things much better and completely change the way of seeing it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68486352357 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80866556084 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533498759305 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5063314011 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.15 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165817879298 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483239847912 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442498948624 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107053225846 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261318896499 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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