Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertisements are the best tools for promoting a product. Producers use a different type of advertisements to allure potential customers, for instance, they advertise their products in magazines, newspapers, radio stations, internet, TV channels, billboards etc. In this advertisements producers use different strategies to make products look better than they really are. I agree with the statement that most advertisements exaggerate about product abilities and features. In the following paragraphs, I will make my points to support my opinion.
Firstly, producer companies just want to sell their products and make revenue, therefore, they use advertisements as a tool to attract customers. When they advertise their products they may use some unethical strategies to make their products look better than they really are. Furthermore, companies use these strategies to differentiate their products from a competitor`s products. Most of the advertisements are flashy and confusing, which make people buy even when there is no need for that product. For instance, on the TV we always watch advertisements about products for losing weight. I bought one cream which convinced me that after 30 minutes my waist will be thinner. Although I know this is impossible, I buy the cream. I was convinced from the good advertisement of the product that will be efficient.
Secondly, most of the advertisements are intend to specific groups of consumers, for example, babies and children. Parents buy almost each thing they see on the TV because they want everything best for their children. Advertisements for diapers are the best example of this. When parents see something different, something better in the diapers ads they started to buy them, in spite of that they are more expensive or maybe worse than other products which have not that appeal ads.
In conclusion, advertisements make a big influence on people`s opinion about products. On the advertisement, we cannot see the true characteristic of the products because producer companies use various strategies to make products greater and to be more appeal for customers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49244712991 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25332898263 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489425981873 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1009332811 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6842105263 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320607836539 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112558153282 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085103893229 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209994594503 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884406468217 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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