Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people can solve important problems in their lives by themselves or with the help of their families. Help from the government is unnecessary.
Although many believe they can solve many important problems in their lives by themselves without government helps, I, on the other hand believe it is impossible to us to solve many important problems without government help. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way in the following.
To begin with, life is challenging these days, and people face many crucial problems in their lives. However, people can solve many of them by their own, but they cannot do many for most of them, problems such as inflation. In my country, Iran, for example, after United Stated and United Nation sanction, goods price increased dramatically, and people could less by their money. In that situation people could not do anything for that, and they totally depend on government to help them. Thus, they forced government to solve this problem, because it affected all aspect of people lives. Thus, my government began negotiation with US and United Nation and implemented some economical improvement to solve that problem. This example illustrate that often people cannot solve their problem with their own or even with their families, and they completely relay on government to solve they problems.
Moreover, almost all people around the globe feel global warming effect in their life. However, many people in our planet do their best to reduce human effect on global warming, but they could not do much because it need governments agreement. For instance. According to new survey In my country recent drought in the nation is because of global warming. Therefore, many people tried to used renewable sources to produce their own home electricity, or used more public transportation instead of their own car, but noting changed. In that specific case only government help could help people to solve their problem. Consequently, because my government access to resources and politic ability they tried to solve that problem by convincing our neighbor country to reduced their carbon emission or renew water reservoir and create new dam to save more water in rain season.
In conclusion, it is for all aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe people cannot solve most of their important problems by their own without government help. This is because they cannot solve crucial problems such as inflation without government helps, and because people can not solve some of their problem without governments power.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20460358056 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60344740614 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460358056266 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2154146076 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.705882353 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05882352941 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417841257946 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152786980301 0.076458572812 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106430923294 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290450906344 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489017624816 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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