Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of the role which television plays in the modern era. It has some revolutionary effects on societies. Some people hold the view that movies and TV have adverse impacts on the way that young people behave, whereas others believe that they are beneficial for young people. Nevertheless, I concur with the latter group's opinion. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on the reasons substantiating my point of view.
To begin with, I assert that by using television, young people can be in touch with the latest news of the entire world. Knowing what is going on around the world, youngsters can get familiar with lots of concepts; Consequently, they can elevate their consciousness. Also, getting familiar with all the happenings around the world can boost their self-confidence since they can have a debate about these happenings with other peoples, especially adults. Additionally, they can prevent terrible incidents if they watch the news.
Furthermore, watching movies and programs on television can improve the knowledge of adolescents. They can watch a documentary or a scientific program and add to their knowledge. Additionally, it can broaden their perspective in many ways and teach them how to behave in many challenging situations. Youngsters have changing interests, and they are usually confused with them. Watching these kinds of programs can help them find their passions and interests. My personal experience is a compelling example of this concept. When I was eighteen years old, I was confused since I did not know what major should I choose in university. Once, I was watching television, and I accidentally watched a program about physics. I understood that I have a severe passion for physics. Therefore, I chose a major related to physics and know I am very happy with what I have chosen. Since then, I really believe that such programs can affect people and cause them to find their path in their life.
Considering all the reasons mentioned above, one could conclude that there are some benefits associated with watching movies and television programs. Adolescents can watch such programs in order to be aware of the latest news. It can be helpful for them and can have a positive influence on their behavior by boosting their self-esteem. Additionally, they can find their interests and passions by watching some instructive programs such as documentaries and scientific programs, to name but a few. Therefore, they really help youngsters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, nevertheless, really, so, then, therefore, whereas, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15085158151 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97776424144 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510948905109 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.110701909 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.68 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.44 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130329079296 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042232529182 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458499313835 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979325159316 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053519039043 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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