Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
tpo51
Nowadays, technological devices affect every body's life in an extraordinary way. The world before the invention of televisions and computers, for example, is completely different from the modern universe. The controversial debate which is raised up here is whether the negative effects of televisions and movies on the behavior of youngsters are more weight than their positive ones. Some people think that the benefits of movies on the way that young adults behave are less than their harms. While other believes in the opposite side. I personally refute this statement that the negative aspects of television is more affected the behaviour of younger individuals in comparison to their positive points. In what follows, I will elucidate my point of view in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that should be mentioned here is that the TV shows and films could be a source of inspiration for youth. Most people become familiar with wide variety of issues just through watching them in television. The television and films present an attractive scene which could attract more attention from society. Such an attraction are not achievable by books, presentatioan and so on. The more a program is attractive, the more people get affected by that. For instance, younger people watch famous persons' biography movie. They become familiar with their life's challenges and their hard working to be a successful person. Indeed, youngsters understand the meaning of hardworking and going on only when they watch a real example of it in other persons' life. These effectiveness of a movie that is shown in the television is incredible.
The other noteworthy reason that should be presented here is that most of the programs provide a free educational environment for people at their comfortable home. Is the television not only a widespread technology all over the world but also a cost-effective educational tool. In the present modern world, television is a common house furnicher. Many young individuals could learn varied issues through free television programs. Actually, the television could provide an equal education opportunity for every one in every single place of globe especially young adults who educated due to the lack of money. There are myriad of students who love learning new things and be a successful person but because of the inadequate educational equipment in their living place, they left school and learning. They would be able to learn through educational television program and even movies and change their future. These kind of effects likey change their behavior in the positive way rather than harmful.
In conclusion, according the all aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that positive effects of television and films are much more than their negative ones. The first reason is that the television and movies can inspire people through their visionary attractions. Moreover, nowadays, movies and televisions are the most common free educational tool that are achievable with the lowest finance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an extraordinary way" with adverb for "extraordinary"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...logical devices affect every bodys life in an extraordinary way. The world before the invention of tele...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 494, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dults behave are less than their harms. While other believes in the opposite side. I ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...r instance, younger people watch famous persons biography movie. They become familiar w...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 755, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...hey watch a real example of it in other persons life. These effectiveness of a movie th...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 769, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this effectiveness' or 'These effectivenesses'?
Suggestion: This effectiveness; These effectivenesses
...al example of it in other persons life. These effectiveness of a movie that is shown in the televis...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 619, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...ted due to the lack of money. There are myriad of students who love learning new thing...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 908, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...nd even movies and change their future. These kind of effects likey change their behavior ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...are achievable with the lowest finance.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34583333333 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86369759033 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497916666667 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1262947519 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.037037037 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247804883813 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718031722465 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602578595791 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178507824278 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531157883482 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.