Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In today's modern world, with galloping progress in advanced technology, whether the youth watch television or not become a controversial issue among people of all walks of life. While some believe that the advantages of T.v is more than its demerits, I personally believe that the negetive effects of television are much more than the positive effects. I feel this for two conspicuious reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
To begin with, Tv distract the youth from their educational activities or their works. We live in the society, where they young tend to forget tasks, Since there is a growing tendency in watching tv program instead of concentrating on their tasks. My personal experience is a compelling evidence for this issue. Five years ago, when i was a university student, after my class, when i got home, I used to watch all tv program untill midnight. I could not study, since I became addict to movie and serials which broadcast. Next day, I was usually sleepy at the classroom and did not pay attention to my teachers. Finally, that semester was the worst in terms of score and learning that i have had so far. If I had not watch Tv, i would have passed that term like my others terms and would be succeed.
Another paramount point which should be taken in to consideration is that siting in front of Televesion affect our body negatively. sitting quite a few of their time, and having sedentary life style, not only brings laziness and tedious state for the young, but also causes health problem such as heart disease, eyesight problem, to name but a few. Instead of watching tv the young people can spend their time both on a gym and doing some work out, or walk in a peace and quiet. By doing so, their physical body will be strengthened.
In conclusion, by taking account all the above reasons and many others, i strongly belive that the demerits of tv program are much more that the merits, due to bringing sedentary life style and distracting the young from their main daily works.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, then, while, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71954674221 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58156823247 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600566572238 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.216543543 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.125 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139903401595 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398231358162 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433911239711 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087487435009 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556726066241 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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