Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
human are all the members of the whole, in creation of one essence and soul. This is a poem from a Persion poet whose name is Sadi. the youth plays a pivotal role a every developing and developed society. Since, the young are the pillar of every country and they gurantee the prosperity of the country by enhancing their abilities. While some people assume that the socity expect that young people follow strict rules, I totally disagree with this idea. I feel this way for some reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
To begin with, thanks to galloping progress in technology and dissemination of information in general, and human science in particular, this idea spread through the whole world that every one equals to others. There is not racial distinction, nor does judgment by the appearance. Black and white are similar than before. As we now, many years ago, the black are served by the white as slaves. They had to do some difficult task for them such as cutting stone, building palace, to name but a few. However, today, every person are judged by their intellectual abilities and skills, not by facial characters. the youth can wear cloth whatever they wish, but before people had obey some rules for wearing. For example, the girl should not have dressed mini skirt, or boys must not have wore small pants. While, we have observed different kind of cloth, with different color, variation style, short or long, was dressed with youth.
Another paramount point which should be taken in to consideration is that, we are witnessing that every people have freedom to choose their religious, practice their rite, have their own culture and tradition. In contrast, in the past, in every country, a teyrany king determined the religious and culture of the whole country. Eveery people had to obey the rules and regulation which was issued by him. In my country, for example, in the era of Saljughian, everybody's religious was Islam. on the other hand, we can choose our school of thouth by ourselves according to achieved knowledge which we can easily access through the virtual world, the Internet.
By takin account all the above reasons and many others, I personally believe that people have more freedom than before, sicne equiality and liberty gradually have casted their shade through the whole world. Therefore, people are not judge by their appearance and race, but by skills and thought.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, in contrast, in general, in particular, kind of, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9312039312 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45690908914 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560196560197 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9552348076 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2272727273 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86363636364 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123891344352 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03369770048 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594200640443 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754131519386 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414854327525 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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