It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation
In today's modern world, the investing money in each society is a controversial issue among all strata of people in community in general, and among government in particular. Since money is limited, hence the budgeting of it should be implemented carefully. while some people believe that governments had better spend money on public transportation improvement, I personally believe that governments should invest money on the Internet access. I feel this way for some conspicuous reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
To begin with, the burgeoning of each society depends on its people's literacy and knowledge directly. Since knowledge plays a pivotal role in implementing breakthrough and inventing cutting edge device, developing the educational culture of the people. The internet makes an increasingly important contribution to access the pure knowledge and getting information, especially for university students. By having access the internet, students can easily search through the internet, get much more information from all over the world, where top universities do striking research. Even students can easily connect with other students or professors and collaborate with each other.
Secondly, facilitating the internet access leads to economic growth improvement of the society. Since the internet facilitate business transaction through the world. In order to illustrate my point I would like to provide more fact and information. Companies can make connections with other companies in order to buy raw materials for their plant and factories, the wheels of the industries start to revolve, and plants start to work more and more. Hence there will be more job opportunities in the country. Furthermore, the company not only can sell its production in its own country, but also can sell them through the whole world; thereby the economic situation of the country will improve. By doing so people enjoys the high and decent standard of living rather than before. While spending money on public transportation does not bring such values.
In conclusion, by taking account all the above reasons and many others, I strongly believe that government should invest money on the internet access rather than public transportation. Not only does the internet bring economic growth, but it also leads to improvement the knowledge of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in conclusion, in general, in particular, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52892561983 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97209305505 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561983471074 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8963612454 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.631578947 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361229083452 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927252220739 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865203772567 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209824504746 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599697243414 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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