Independent Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
as inseparable part of each modern world, the issue of people's health plays a pivotal role in any society. as by the advent of high technology and growth of endustrialisation, not only the environment have been damaged, the human being health have been affected negatively too. Hence, I strongly believe that one of the most important way to improve human health is to keep the environment clean. I feel this way for some reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
to begin with, food is one of the paramount issue that has effect on our health. If our environment is dirty and full of toxic material, both agriculture product ,which feed on soil directly, such as rice, beans, fruits, namely but a few, and animal which ,provide our meat and polean, such as sheep, cow, pig will be posionus for our body. Since all these source of nourishment provide their food from the soil. For example, in our country, some area because of nuclear war has affected. in these area, almost the majority of children which are born are paralyeas and slaw. such as inability in some of their bodies, lack of eyesight, etc. researchers found that the soil of these field was toxic and these issue has negative effect on the infant and their mothers.
Another paramount issue which should be taken in to consideration is that human beings enjoy the green and sustainable environment physically and mental, since humans are interested in aesthatic. If the environment is lack of any air or water pollution, beautify with evergreen trees and flowers, almost the majority part of the youth tend to go outside and do some exercise so that they may refresh their mind and reduce their stress. lets take our rural area as an example. many years ago, when I was a child, our reigion was very neat and beautiful person.. there was a lake where beuitfil seabirds flow above it and feed on from it. people used to do some excersie during the day especially at the morning near there. by the advent of so called "high technology and machine age" our roural suffer from air and water pollution. sadly, the lake gradually dried out and no body go there ever. these area conver to a place for accumulation rubbish and debris. therefor people have no area to do excersice of even take a deep breath. most of the youth suffer from heart desease because of lack of oxygen and sedentary lifestyle.
by taking account all the above reasons and many others, I personally believe that environment plays an important role in human's health. since not only does it improve their health mentally, but it also physically by eating food.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, as to, for example, i feel, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77876106195 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54264281813 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530973451327 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1434996673 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.5376344086 560% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116057196368 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346338769326 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547307419754 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880310178396 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590889312074 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.