Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.

Needless to say, the environment and air polluted play an essential role in society. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that the clean environment has not an important impact on health physical, other individuals believe that the clean environment plays an essential in l in our physical health. Speaking personally, I agree with the second group. Two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated in the following paragraphs.

First of all, cleaning the environment plays an important role in our physical and mental health. In fact, it is clear that air pollution has a negative effect in every stratum of society, especially children and older people. air pollution reduces physical health due to increased greenhouse gases such as carbon dioxide. So, diseases such as cancer because we breathe polluted air. For example, ten years ago, when I was a little girl, my friend and I played in the open air, after I got sick after visiting a doctor, we found out that playing in the open air with high levels of pollution is the cause of my illness. Thus, this example illustrates that air pollution plays a radical role in the health of individuals.

second, air pollution has a significant impact on the environment, such as animals and plants. In fact, using polluted water to irrigate vegetables and trees can make them sick. therefore, eating contaminated vegetables can increase human disease. For example, large oil and gas companies in the oceans and seas increase pollution at sea that increases illness in the fishes like salmon and sardines. As a result, eating dirty meat makes us sick. therefore, clean the environment improves health in any part of society such as animals, plant and human beings.

In conclusion, cleaning the environment plays an important role in health physical of people because reduce diseases in human being, animals and plant.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18387096774 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76437873713 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541935483871 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4181352173 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5294117647 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142579564859 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496298638848 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557771495127 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105869142812 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474715367572 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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