If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
In today's modern world, the money, in other worlds the cost of living, plays an increasingly pivotal role in people's lives. While some people are inconscious about their expense, others make all their efforts to save money and reduce the cost of their lives. I personally suggest my friend ,who wants to decline the cost of living, find a roommate to share their common cost. I feel this way for two conspicuous reasons which are pinpointed in the following.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that by finding a roommate not only one can share some expenses such as the bill of electricity, cost of house's cleaning the, but also can make much more money in comparison before. Since, without any doubt, two thought work better than one, that is, by having roommate one can exchange idea, information in general and improve his or her skill by learning new things specially in the area of the major in particular. Becoming skilled can be one of the condition of getting good job with high salary. My personal experience can be a compelling evidence for this issue. Last year, when I was graduate from Tehran university, I rented an apartement and decided to find a job in a city where is located far from my hometown. however, unfortunately, I could not find a decent job. My financial situation was very in terrible condition so that I had to seek for a roommate. fortunately, my roommate was skillful in my major, I mean architecture, and learned me some related software. As a consequence, thanks to her consideration and kindness. I found a decent and high paid job. furthermore, I should say cooking food at home is time consuming and is not a useful idea for the these modern world with the busy lifestyle. on the other hand, buying new technological devices are really useful for using for work and getting promotion in the job.
Another paramount issue which should be taken into consideration is that human being innately need to socialize. no one can live alone for ever, especially due to hectic lifestyle and economic recession, which cause numerous problem for the youth such as having stressful life, being disappointed, to nam but a few. by finding a roommate one can share their feeling , express their idea and alleviate some of the life's stress. Let's back to previous example. By getting a roommate I shared my problem with her, took some advices, and felt happier than before.
In conclusion, by taking account all above reasons and many others, I get advice my friend to share her room with a new friend. by doing so, not only she can make more money , but also can express her feeling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, while, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73406593407 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66130473449 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558241758242 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7692641514 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.652173913 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7826086957 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73913043478 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145495613374 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396508842462 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407038769626 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845579234092 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136234367619 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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