Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded, and bad people are punished.
In modern century television is one of the most popular objects for the peoples’ free time. Children and young individuals are make up the most percentage of the audience. Pursuant to this, television programs will have some effects on the children. Thus, when there is a program about good people or bad people, Tv can show the result of the behavior beneficially, because there will be consequences about the vision that the program gives to the audience. I will illustrate my points in the following essay.
Initially, Tv can introduce positive and negative characters more appropriately. In other words, they can produce a program and show the result of the different behaviors and show advantages and disadvantages, despite that, they can show how people can change their way and turn to a good person, as well. To illustrate, imagine a child who did something wrong, then this young and sensitive creature watch a Tv show that shows bad people and their punishment, This child will sense he/ she is not a good child or thinks there is no way to fix it. Therefore, I think introduce good people with a reward and bad people with punishment is inappropriate.
Secondly, Tv can change the way and show the bad people as a person who can change and the benefits after that. This way audience can see if they leave their bad behaviors or do not continue a bad way, they can live better and happy. I personally, had an experience. When I was younger, I did a habit, which was bad for my lifestyle. Whenever I decided to leave that, I saw Tv programs or Dr, who had lectures in Tv, And she just repeats that If you this, You won’t be able to change your life and I always thought this never change, so why I should try?! Because of that affects I change my lifestyle late and If did it sooner my life could be better now. Thus, I think the televisions program is more important than the producer thinks.
In conclusion, they can show good people and bad people with rewards or punishment, But, If they just teach how bad people can change and make their life easier, It will be more helpful and generous.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, i think, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59946949602 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63299712088 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477453580902 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.9491781931 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.375 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258912716291 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925150009462 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092250132038 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179779646321 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344225250945 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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