Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded, and bad people are punished
Recently the phenomenon of subjects of films has sparked a heated debate. In this connection, several avenues show stories. Although contested by many that the matter of praising people with positive personalities, and punishing one with negative behaviors is beneficial, such an issue is regarded both constructive and positive by a substantial number of the individuals. I concur with the notion that movies should have stories in which good people be acclaimed and determining penalties for bad people, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
Firstly, if people understand that the final destination of negative people is hard, they will be encouraged to engage in positive activities. To be more specific, rewarding a positive person in movies has a positive effect on humans to do the same things to get a prize, so it increases their motivation to participate in positive deads. However, when people consider that immoral humans always are punished, they avoid performing uninterested activities. According to my own experience, when I was a high school student, I was addicted to cigarettes. One day, I watched a television program which shows a smoky man suffering from respiratory disease, and he felt a considerable amount of pain is his skeleton. Moreover, the program explained that it was a punishment for a person who smokes, so it influenced me, so much so that I abandon cigarettes.
Secondly, strong characters in a movie are selected as a role model; thus, it is beneficial that videos show the hero as a great person and award them to decrease aggressive behaviors. To elucidate, people are looking for whom they can imitate as their favorite person, so they select one as a hero who is credited in a film. For example, my son's enjoyable cartoon has a hero who is supported by people in a city because of his helpful actions and rescuing citizens from danger. As he is a role model for my son, he always emulates him and helps people. Therefore, he carries heavy bags for an old one and helps little kids to cross a street.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that stories should be defined penalty for an inferior person, but a healthy person should be admired. Not only does the approving positive characters derive people accomplishing useful activities, but it also decreases violence in society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04797979798 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93661028767 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563131313131 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5969896666 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.588235294 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21043509641 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582092618291 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604186655304 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127511174877 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637102037951 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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