Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
In today's constantly connected world, the world is changing at a rapid pace because of the actions of human populations. I do believe that as the population increase the influence of each individual behavior on society increase. The issue of humans’ behavior and elements that has influence on it have always been a controversial question among individuals all over the world. This matter can be considered from different aspects so that one can get new insights into this issue. While some people think the behavior of humans and its improvement are not as crucial as other problems are, I am inclined that each individual’s behavior has had a considerable effect on his/her society and also on the whole world. In this regard, governments and parents should consider this essential matter and take enough time to improve young people’s behavior. The following paragraphs will illustrate my perspective.
First and for most, it is crystal clear that movies and television have a considerable influence on each person’s behavior especially young individuals and children. Should the government pay enough attention to this crucial issue, they will not only a have fully-fledged country but also can improve humans' lifestyles. Although it might be a time-consuming project to improve individuals' behavior by movies and television, it makes a considerable amount of benefits for both humans and their country. In this regard, the realm plays the most significant role. I think should the government consider this element, they will not only have less criminal activity in their society but also can improve their economy and even reduce the crime rate.
Furthermore, I do believe that movies and television programs can also be important as books and magazines can in the subject of their effect on each individual’s behavior. As a tangible example, two years ago, I was watching a dramatic film which is about people who lived in the out skirt of the city with my immediate family. The film was about the problem of extreme poverty in this region. There were also many families who are living below the poverty line. Poverty and underdevelopment contributed to a host of additional problems in that area. Hardly had we finished watching that film when my sister who was seven years old started to save his money to buy some toys for the children who live in the margins of our society. I think movies and television not only have preliminary results in each person with a wide range of stages but also create a significant number of long-running effects on them.
In conclusion, I think were governments and parents to consider movies and television as a way for the improvement of their children’s behavior, movies and television would not only have a great number of advantages for them but also prevent their children to do many criminal activities. All in all, I strongly disagree with the above statement and I do believe that this element can improve individuals’ behavior in any stage of their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, i think, in conclusion, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07429718876 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9176485708 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483935742972 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9592084251 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.333333333 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159805704658 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478387033655 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512996044791 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107229058814 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385725452023 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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