Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave?
By and large, entertainment has a prominent role in our daily life. When it comes to having a well-balanced lifestyle that brings satisfaction and prosperity to teenagers' lives, their activities during free time are as decisive as other parts like education. As a result, how young people should spend their time is a place of contention, where some people believe that watching television or movies have more negative effects on teenager behaviors than positive ones. I entirely agree with this statement. Two reasons are elaborately discussed in the following that helps the substantiation of my perspective.
For the first reason, my conviction is that some television programs and movies are not suitable for young people. In other words, youngsters are more sensitive to the contents they are exposed to because their personality is being shaped at these ages. As a result, they should be cautious about what they are watching on television since it may affect them hugely and determine a specific personality trait or belief they have. Moreover, parents usually have not enough observation over what their teenagers choose to see on television or in movie theaters. Although some television programs may have useful messages, the negative effects movies have on young people outweigh the positive ones.
Another equally important reason is that watching television or movies can turn into an addictive habit that influences adolescents’ mental and physical condition. As we know, watching television is a passive activity that affects both the mind and body. Consequently, it can be seen that today many children and even adults are obsessed with watching television for long hours. Instead of sitting in front of the television for long hours, young people can benefit from their leisure time with more beneficial activities like sports or spending time with their peers. Not only do these activities have long-lasting positive effects on children's behavior, but also help them to foster their mental and physical abilities. For instance, when I was a child, I barely watched tv, and I used to play football with my friends in my free time. In this way, most of the time, I felt happy and energetic. Moreover, it was only when I grew up that I came to the conclusion of how beneficial it was for me to watch less television or movies. Had I not had alternative hobbies, I would have harmed my body and soul by excessive watching of films and television.
According to the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that many teenagers may find watching television or movies tempting, so they should be aware of the adverse effects these kinds of hobbies have on them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, so, well, as for, for instance, as a result, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11136363636 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83413282757 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2841146687 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.45 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305900970463 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908237527009 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093159223197 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195198149024 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627923615289 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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