Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The leaps and bounds of technology today ushered in the development of films and television programs. Some assert that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave, while others disagree with it. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that there are much more negative effects than positive effects.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea is that young people will copy inappropriate behavior from movies and television. Young people are not mature enough to think independently and they are easier to be influenced by what they have seen. Thus, it is hard for them to distinguish whether those stories are true or fictional and whether the behavior is right or wrong. For example, my brother watched an action movie that is full of tracing and fighting. The day after he watched the movie, he hurt one of his classmates since he wanted to imitate what the characters had done in the movie.
Another point I should deem is that spending a lot of time watching television will lead to physical disadvantages. To delineate, setting in the same place watching TV for a long time without exercise would result in obesity. Moreover, if young people watch movies at a close distance, they will probably be nearsighted. Take my personal experience for example. I enjoyed watching movies and I seldom went to outdoor activities to exercise and I became out of shape a few weeks later.
Last but not least, it is true that some educational television programs could benefit young people, but it is not likely that they would like to watch them. Young people usually enjoy watching interesting and exciting movies instead of boring educational programs. They feel uncomfortable if they are forced to watch those educational programs which they dislike. Thus, the positive effect on young people is rare since they seldom watch beneficial TV shows.
What can be concluded from the aforementioned reasons and examples is that, as a result, the negative effect result from TV and films are much more than the positive effects. Television and movies have negative influences on both mental and physical behavior.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00824175824 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69540498001 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524725274725 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.2827461891 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.9473684211 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276086712025 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877678929435 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10913318483 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176411088921 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124939909561 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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