Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Generally, with the unexampled progress of the modern world today, media plays an absolutely crucial role in every aspect of the people's life. Young people, as the most prominent members of the society are no exception. In this regard, some people believe that media have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave, while others think otherwise. I, personally, subscribe to the former one for a number of reasons, two of which are of great importance compared to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
First and foremost, media has an astonishing impact on the spread of disobedience and misbehavior among teenagers and children. Young people, as the most vulnerable members of the society, are exposed to improper contents such as violence, disobedience and delinquency. They watch their heroes, whose goals are reaching fame and wealth in the expense of ignoring moralities, and find a kind of inclination toward these evil behaviors. As an example, couple of days ago I read in news that a teenager had a severe row with one of his friends at school. According to the article, the reason was that he thought that his friend had stolen some money from his bag and he declared that he was imitating his favorite actor's behavior in order to take revenge. Were it not for the influence of the violent content of the movies, he would not act that way.
Having discussed the issue from the previous perspective I would rather look at it from another point of view. Media has provided an environment that persuades young people especially teenagers to imitate some improper role models and become a slave to the fashion industry. Nowadays, we see teenagers that allot a huge deal of their precious time and energy to be aware of the latest trends in the fashion world. On the other hand, the powerful authorities use celebrities as a tool to achieve their intentional goals, which is attracting teenagers to their industry. These process prevents teenagers from focusing on their educational purposes, and more importantly, from thinking about some essential issues in their life, like finding a decent goal for their life. Hence, they pay less attention to improve their personality.
In summary, taken into account all the above-mentioned arguments into consideration it can be concluded that media have more negative effects on young children than positive effects. Not only does it convey some improper content to this vulnerable stratum, but also it makes them a slave to follow the unsuitable role models and waste their precious time in the expense of the progress of fashion industry.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, while, in summary, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07603686636 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71452139995 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555299539171 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.906310848 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.388888889 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155686568089 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046941966789 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855838755529 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109273672751 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802484213716 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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