Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every child will become an adult in the near future. In this sense, the question that how to prepare children well for their adult life is important. Some people claim that the best way is to encourage them to partake in part-time jobs. In my view, I agree with this idea, and my reasons are shown below.
To begin with, children can acquire practical skills when they participating in part-time jobs. Almost everyone will work in the labor market in their adult lives, no matter for their subsistences or for fulfilling their higher goal. Therefore, being talented in a specific field or possessing a skill is essential. From participating in a workspace, they can learn lots about them. For example, if one joining a part-time job in a convenience store, they can acquire the knowledge of how to organize the goods and products on the shelves; or they can develop a better sense of calculation-from selling the product to their customers. Or considering that joining an internship in a car factory. By working with their colleagues, they can assimilate the skills such as how to fixing a car or operating instruments. Therefore, working in a part-time job is valuable for children to be well-prepared in the future.
Furthermore, working in a real job helps teenager sharpen their mental strength. Working in labor markets provide children not only with concrete skill but something intangible. Today children are usually tender that they cannot withstand in a pressure environment. Hence, having a part-time job is a good opportunity for them to reinforce this weakness. To illustrate, in the workspace, we can feel the stress that results from the impending deadline of a project. Or, the anger from the leader when you made a mistake. From these experiences, a child's mind can be stronger and more sound, which is beneficial for them to conquer the challenges in their adulthood.
To sum up, as far as I am concerned, joining in a part-time job is good training for children to prepare them in their adult lives. They can get more skills and win a stronger mind as well.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for example, such as, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9178470255 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87869159771 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518413597734 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0460914183 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33796866875 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964869038256 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653796797927 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220116477017 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260619512135 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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