Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The technological advancements have developed many communication methods, most predominant of all the social media, through which celebrities have obtained a lot of opportunities to influence people. However, many believe that celebrities opinions are more important to the juveniles, a notion which I agree for two considerable reasons that I am going to explore here.
The first cogent reason is that young people are much more flexible than older people. They are open to new ideas and fashion. In fact, they are in a permanent search for these new things. On the other hand, as the older people's personality has already shaped, they have rigid strict principles and opinions that usually make them loath to accept new things. For example, consider the way adolescents dress or choose their hairstyles, and how this changes every year, while older people tend to dress as the same way for many years. Additionally, many older people don't feel comfortable with technology and avoid using it. They are usually out of the cyberspace that can connect them with the famous entertainers and athletes. On the contrary, young people have more access to social media, and they spend more time there, a fact which can intensify the effects of celebrities who use this medium to influence.
Alongside the reason above, celebrities are usually more popular and revered among younger people. Usually celebrities become the younger people's idols whom they conspicuously try to comply and imitate in lifestyle. Older people who are obviously wiser in such cases, usually reprimand younger people for their point of view and they don't care about celebrities. I remember when it was the election time in Iran, one of the candidates had paid celebrities to speak in their support. It had a profound effect on the young people, most of whom were so influenced that they voted for the candidate, causing him to win the presidential election.
According to the aforementioned reasons, although some people may disagree, the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people. Not only are they more open to new opinions, but also they respect celebrities more, the fact which makes them more liable to be influenced by celebrities. Young people should be aware of this effect and at least try to have some control over it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, at least, for example, in fact, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13157894737 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75265673733 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528947368421 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7927568846 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291962032492 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981190087854 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059843544765 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171370803503 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522195018625 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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