Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Job is a dispensible part of human life, which provides social respectability and of course money for people. Choosing the job is a crucial decision that can affect the personality, the whole life span, and future of a person. Whether it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' or to choose jobs that are very different from their parent's job has long been a controversial question. I believe it is not easy to reach a consensus on this topic and some points have to be considered in each case, some of which are elaborated here.
Some parents have appropriate jobs that they have been very successful in them. Take, for instance, a successful businessman or a well-known doctor, people who have achieved great respect and have acceptable income. There are many advantages in pursuing these kinds of jobs for the children. The parents have plenty of knowledge and experience about their occupation that they can share with their children. In fact, they have already provided a foundation that can help the children from the beginning. On the other hand, usually, these parents have many relations in the job that can help their children.
Alongside the case discussed above, there are many parents who are not satisfied with their jobs. For example, consider a worker who has to do mundane and drudgery tasks in a factory. He does not have high social rank and makes a meager income that is not sufficient for his needs. Although such parents have many experiences that they can teach their children, the children can try to choose better jobs for themselves. Actually, it is in these poor families that many children are motivated to strive hard for great ambitions. There is still great opportunity for these children to succeed. If the children are restricted to choose jobs similar to their parents', they would never be able to improve their rank in society.
According to what we discussed, it is obvious that choosing jobs similar to the parents' is not necessarily a good factor. Some important issues should be considered in pursuing parents' occupation. It is recommended that parents try to make the children aware of different pros and cons of the job they are familiar with and let the children choose for their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...hildren, the children can try to choose better jobs for themselves. Actually, it is in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, so, still, well, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89090909091 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62566956499 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462337662338 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1905033624 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.15 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420222001858 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147219840877 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130643243788 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306745529992 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614192640491 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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