Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Money is the second good and it’s require will unending. Whatever we would like to do we need the currency. It is the determiner of our social class. Someone would have express his or her disagreement with the management of money from young age is important to become a discreet adult. But, in my view the practicing of money management from early adult is important for the following reasons.
The main reason is that excessive money makes someone spendthrift. When a child has the enough room or wealth to get money and don't know it would have some limitations. Then, the child will become indiscreet about his choice. He will make his family in great danger. For example, when I was reading in class nine in a remote areas of Bangladesh, I would have got a scary experience. In my class, I have a friend name Shohag, who had enough aristocracy. Whenever, he needs money, his father provided that. This practice was interrupted when his father was die. Then, he left the class and started to work in a shop to maintain his family livelihood. On that time, he started to understand the grim reality and became regretful for his uneconomical behavior. As you can see that, excessive money would cause a great turn in our life and we should discreet during our spending.
Another reason is that disruption of money makes or prone to do some unethical behavior. When a younger is used to get substantial amount of money, he become unrestrained in manner. When disrupted this practice, he is prone to do many bad things such as corruption, violent activities. For instance, a few years ago an article was published from Prothom Alo- a well-known Bangladeshi newspaper. It had disclosed, a girl name Oisye who was the reason for her family murders. The reason behind her brutal acts was, her father was refused to give her money. Before that event, she used to access a lot of money. And she used that money for addictions. When the process was halted, she did that heinous crime. This experience taught me that, excessive access of money often make human to do unacceptable deeds.
In sum, someone would have wish to provide enough details about the good effect to provide money to younger but in long run it will create a real problems. Not only, it have retarded to become a discreet man but also it will make vulnerable to do unacceptable works. So, we should not give excessive money to your younger before they understood the real deal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72897196262 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60593948595 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502336448598 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8293202605 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.7931034483 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7586206897 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93103448276 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154616459489 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447364171919 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451085487936 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106919222607 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047288596913 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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