Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Success is the most desired thing in this world. To become a successful person there many things to do and many criteria to be fulfilled such as patience, diligent, uprightness and unswerving mentality. The people who are top tier in their career are constantly to do something new rather than doing the same prosaic things repeatedly- someone would agree this proclamation others would not. In my view, I support the excerpt wholeheartedly as it is the core of success and going to elaborates by giving the following two important reason.
The main reason is that doing something new enable to success in career. We are seeking job in the competitive world. Getting job is hard task and depends other but doing some business by own is more independent and reliable. For example, in my high school life, I came to know a successful tycoon name professor Dr. Yunus, who is the founder of Grameen Bank. He started his bank by giving loan to the poor people who has not affordability to do business and who are not enough space to survive. Then, Dr. Yunus had helped to change their living conditions and became recognized by the world. Ultimately, he got the Nobel Prize for his different approach to eradicate the poverty. As you can see that, doing something new by self helps to excel to get the top tier than being ingrained only the social structured roles.
Another reason is that, successful people are become creative in their work that helps to the advancement the technology, scientific fields such as medicine, new drug discovery etc. The advancement of technology and medical fields are understandable. In our everyday life we need to use technology for communication, business, and research purpose. But, these achievement were not come only by a matter of seconds. They were come by the effort of great scientist and technologist. To be more specific, a few days ago I need to submit my research paper to my supervisor. But, on that time I was not at my university, so I mailed it. It was possible due to the internet availability. This experience taught me that, if the technologist and scientist were fixed only the ancient mode of things then our life never ever like that easy, comfortable and fast. Rather, they are trying every day to do something new and different and that made them successful.
To wrap up, it is possible to support to other side of the picture by describing not to do the new things but in long run it will not feasible and convincing to accept. Taking risk and doing different not only inspire us but also made our life fast and easy. So, we should do something new and different in order to become an influential person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'elaborate'.
Suggestion: elaborate
... it is the core of success and going to elaborates by giving the following two important r...
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Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this achievement' or 'these achievements'?
Suggestion: this achievement; these achievements
...n, business, and research purpose. But, these achievement were not come only by a matter of secon...
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Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accepting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: accepting
...run it will not feasible and convincing to accept. Taking risk and doing different not on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, then, for example, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76077586207 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77353775976 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532327586207 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3385555828 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.36 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.56 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320163377139 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766389135136 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726933753092 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200494287195 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053299173451 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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