Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Education has an influential and tremendous impact on our daily lives. It is utterly important to get well education because it is the building blocks of our society. Although, some people are disagree with the idea that parents are more involved in their kids education in the past than recently, my personal experience and actual observation of life had led me to agree with the idea that, parents are more involved now than before in their children education for the reasons I will explore in this paragraph.
To begin with, most of parents nowadays, have only one child, because of life's pressure. So they are trying their best to focus on how to educate their kid well and how to bring him\her to a high level of knowledge to be more talented than other peers. For instance, let me write about my personal experience. I am a general dentist from Iraq and I have only a 10 years old boy. I put a lot of efforts to teach him in a right way, I revise every single topic with him everyday, and I give him extra work to do, beside his homework. Every time I have to explain to him, why I am doing this way in teaching, he is convinced, because he has a dream to be a dentist too, to run my clinic in the future. So, because he is the only one, I have to push him to study hard, by making a strict plan and asked him to follow it. Because, I want him to be well educated and competitive.
Moreover, we can notice that there is an increasing in the number of families who have realized that education is very important in life, in order to get a secure job in this pacing life. For example, I remembered when i was a kid, my parents were scheduled a daily plan for me to study different topics, after I done with my homework. I have to study a book a bout general knowledge in order to broaden my horizon.
In conclusion, after judging all what I have mentioned above, taking all factors into consideration, I reinforce my idea that, parents are more involved recently in educating their kids than before, because they want their kid to be well informed, responsible and ready to fit any career in the future. So, let us do our best as parents and push our children forward to get the higher level of education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36803874092 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51445061149 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510895883777 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4109943435 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.75 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239907064353 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684938638222 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861789777157 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162806393415 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983525630732 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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