Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We have lived in a quite different world compared to previous generation. When it comes to education, people may feel that parents today spend less time in teaching their children. In my view, I maintain that this observation is true. The reasons are provided as follow.
To begin with, since the growing trend of educational facilities, parents nowadays devolve large portion of their educational responsibility to those facilities. Compared to few decades ago, when people lived in less-developed society, our modern lives are filled with various companies that are in charge of teaching new skills or reinforce the academic performance for students. For example, we can easily find the corresponding schools if a child wants to learn piano, checker, calculation, and so on. What's more, the most prominent academic institutes are cram school in Taiwan, which provides students with versatile of programs for intensifying the subjects in their school, including mathematics, science, or English. With the appearance of these facilities, they largely substitute the parents work for educating their children, and consequently, the time parents spent on their children's education become lesser.
Besides, the increasingly busy life in modern society has diminished the time of parents companying their children. With the transition of the society, jobs have changed from the agricultural related task to more intense and more competitive form. To illustrate, if parents work in factory, they need to take the night shift or to be on-call because the manufacturing lines process for twenty-four hours. In this sense, the time that should be remained for their children decrease. On the other hand, people usually face enormous pressure to preserve their competitiveness-edge in our society of globalization. To be specific, if one work in the company such as Facebook, they may find they are competing with a range of opponents: from Chinese their native corporation, Microsoft to the foreign one like Baidu. Not only parents work late in daily basis but also they need do over-time work during weekend. As a result, the time for tutoring their children will be miniscule.
To sum up, today parents spend less time on children's education. There are two main reasons that cause this phenomena: increasing educational facilities and the much more hectic lives of modern people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, may, so, for example, in fact, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38873994638 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98143334526 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587131367292 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.931132911 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.789473684 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242813554388 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805729084154 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643595921125 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157453646336 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175859721673 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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