Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of modern society, the job market becomes more complicated and the competition among employers are fiercer than before. some argues that career in the past would lead to a successful, secure future readily. From my perspective, I agree with the statement for the following reasons.
First and foremost, people have less choice about their work in the past since the lacking of economic development. For instances, people used to make their living rather than enjoy themselves, especially the amount of poverty-stricken families which could hardly afford their children to attain well-education. Under this circumstance, people would work earlier and harder in order to gain more financial support, and as a result, their future is changing because of their hard working.
Furthermore, in the contemporary society, people are facing competitive job market which has requisites of high-end skills and comprehensive development. With the accelerating of economic development, companies can receive numbers of personal files from different universities or job-seeker websites, so they have more choices than before, on the contrary, the people seeking jobs would confront with complicated questions and advanced evaluative systems to judge whether they are qualified or not. For example, my brothers graduated from university. he is seeking for a job recently, and each company he applied for posts the requirements with a high standard, which would not happen before. More and more companies he views, the increasing depression and lost feelings he gets. Consequently, he prepare to learn some extra classes in order improve his performance when having interviews next time. According to the example of my brother, I can draw a conclusion that most of job or career nowadays are unable to lead to a successful future.
In a nutshell, I hold the believe that people in the past were easier to find a career or job which could led them to a hopeful and successful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, well, for example, for instance, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34394904459 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0051901093 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579617834395 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2815674174 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.857142857 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18114940003 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655575859626 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597769309244 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121448808135 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053991209508 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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