Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the current modern world where we are living, the importance of decision making in the success or failure of individuals' lives is evident, therefore everybody tries to make the best decision. While many people assert that youngsters used to be dependent on their parents to decide about their personal lives, others believe otherwise and think that young people are capable of making essential decisions about their future. I strongly support the latter group for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that nowadays due to the enhancement of technology all people, especially young generations, have access to a wide range of information and they are more aware of the news in society and have a higher level of knowledge compared to their counterparts in the past. These all help individuals to be mature enough to make various decisions independently. Take the following personal experience as an example; when I used to choose my major for university, I got a lot of beneficial information about various majors by searching through the internet. For example, I found some articles about mechanical engineering, civil engineering, and other majors which had really helpful information about the salary and the workspace of these subjects. All of this information led me to choose civil engineering as my field of study. My father, however, since he had not had enough knowledge about different majors, had to rely on his father's experience and chose agricultural engineering while he was more interested in electrical engineering. If my father had had access to enough information about different majors, he would definitely choose another major in which he was interested instead of agriculture.
Furthermore, another equally remarkable point is that nowadays, the approach of the educational system in schools and universities has changed and is leading students to learn practical skills. This new educational manner helps youths to be skillful enough to find out the right path when confronted with dilemmas or difficulties throughout their personal lives. Therefore, young individuals feel less need for others' help, particularly their parents, in making precise decisions as they are able to do so independently.
By taking into account all the above reasons, I believe that today young people are less dependent on their parents in making decisions. It is because they are equipped with a rich diversity of gainful information, which can come in handy for making the right decision, and also the changes in the educational system’s approach lead them to independence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1080, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...in electrical engineering. If my father had had access to enough information about diff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2238.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31591448931 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.972304232 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543942992874 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4456691025 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.2 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0666666667 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298693537265 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987850530162 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101834501147 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207227114307 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938752920941 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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