Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People often may debate this argument. It is not easy to agree or disagree with the following statements without considering good reasons for the choice. Many people may state that young people are too dependent on their parents in the recent era. Others may claim that youngsters are intelligent to make decisions for their lives. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that young people are able to make any decision in today's era. My opinion is based on the following reasons.
To begin with, due to advanced technology adults have easy access to any information they need. To elaborate broadly, the internet is such a blessing for young people. They can get any guidance by searching online. In fact, people have access to mobile phones, laptops whereby they can get answers within a blink of an eye. Whereas, in the past because of lack of any internet connections and access to electronic gadgets young people tended to depend on their parents to resolve any problem. Take my experience as compelling evidence to explain this phenomenon. When I was in school if I had any questions regarding my choices, which class should I take even school homework, I used to ask my parents. Nevertheless, my niece is in the fifth grade. She does her homework all by herself. Not only this but also she decides which extracurricular activities she needs to take in her school. Once when I asked her how she manages all this alone, she told me she asks her friend google for any information. If she would not have access to the internet, she would not have learned how to find solutions by herself. Perhaps, she may take advice from her parents. This example clearly illustrates the effectiveness of advanced technology on young people.
Furthermore, improved education plays a vital role in children's development which deter the need for parent's guidance in young people's life. To explain broadly, today, offsprings get international education which allows their better growth. Actually, young people are smarter than their parent's generation since they get a sea of knowledge from their school only. That is why youngsters learned problem-solving skills and they do not need their parents. Whereas, in the past, people could get basic education in their community school. There was no high education in their time so thoughts of their grandparents passed to them. A typical example in my case when I started elementary school, we did not have any extracurricular activities and behavior, management classes. We had just academic classes. On the other hand, my niece has taken all those classes. Indeed, she is an all-rounder. This ability make her self capable of making her own decisions. If she had not taken international education, she would have not developed these important skills. This example vividly explains the impact of advanced education on young adults
In conclusion, in the modern era, young people are capable to make their own decision by themselves without parent's guidance. This is because of the advanced technology and education which help them to outgrow their box. Therefore I recommend considering these reasons before making any choices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, therefore, whereas, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2654.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08429118774 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75663775049 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488505747126 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4597599215 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8285714286 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9142857143 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65714285714 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3359741182 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833540833626 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967811808505 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266150807186 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132471601878 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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