Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.
Appearance is something that creates an outlet of your personality and the way people look at you. Wearing different clothes establishes a sense of awareness among people of who you are. People behave differently when they wear different clothes. In my view, clothes influence the way people behave.
First, a good appearance with proper clothing creates a pleasant personality and perceptions among people about us. With fitted clothes, people behave you as a high-class person whereas wearing some dirty or poor clothes makes an impression of low class. For example, I went to the shopping mall with my friend. We were looking at different clothes and keeping those clothes with us for trial. After the moment, we went into the shoe section to select a pair of shoes. That was the time when I got judged by an unknown customer. He misunderstood me thinking me as a staff and asked me regarding the help for his shoes which he later realized that he made some mistake and then while leaving, he apologized to me. I was wearing trousers, t-shirt and a pair of slippers for which he thought I must be one of the staff working over there whereas he did not ask my friend the same thing as he was well dressed. So, clothes create a pleasant personality and a sense of awareness among people about us.
Second, appearance shows the profession and a sense of trust among people. When we were clothes, it represents whether we are going for a job or the business we are in like medicine, bankers and so on. For example, once I stayed at my friend’s house, and the next morning he was prepared to go to the hospital. As he is a doctor, he wore a white apron and put stethoscope. I told him to drop me on his way to the hospital. When he dropped me, one of my friends was there and came saying hello to me and him without even talking to my friend, asked him in which hospital he was working. So, that was the situation where his dress about his profession noticed him. Also, there was a situation when we had a conversation regarding some changes in our society. There was a guy who was poorly dressed who shared his idea regarding the moves. I noticed that his plan was good, but nobody cared about him, whereas one of the society members shared the same design and was noticed by all. The differences were apparent. So, the presentation shows the profession and creates a sense of belief among people.
In sum, though some people believe that clothes do not influence the way people behave. I think people have different perception toward us according to our appearance, and also clothes create a sense of belief among people.
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Suggestion:
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...d him in which hospital he was working. So, that was the situation where his dress about...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, then, well, whereas, while, for example, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6012793177 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55914174094 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473347547974 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6259662753 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9259259259 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3703703704 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237978496318 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872808109151 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113213839694 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235031368547 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166443513287 0.0645574589148 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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