To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
The director of student housing at Bukingham College beleives that College should build new dormitories for the students. However, the memo provides no evidence to support this arguement, and the director may not bee talking other variables, alternative solutions, or the college interest into consideration.
The director assumes doubling of students based on trending and growing enrollments but the memo never cites evidence to support this position. It do not seemed to be well researched, if it was done so, where are the datas related to it and the paper regarding the information of ongoing trends which makes arguement to be flawed.Additionally, the director should have considered other factors that might have shown that, students will be doubled and space will be inadequate in dormitories which is based on the statistics shown by research.
Here again, the director assumes that rent for an appartment to be risen but do not provide any evidence to support this arguement. The biil paid to the owner of house by student could have been showed to the college, so that to make arguement more stronger and more believable. Due to lack of beleivable facts, the arguemnet is rife with holes.
Finally, the director believes that, students will have difficulty to afford off-campus due to high rent and also will lead in increasing number of students due to adding new dormitories. In contrast, he does not provide any evidence as a for of letter by students to the director regarding the problems the would have to afford off-campus, which makes the arguement flawed and the idea presented seemed to be shown without any study or report.
As it currently stands, College should build new dormitories for the students, memo announces recommendation that appears to have been made in a vaccum.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1473 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.976 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.693 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.174 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.717 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...s evidence to support this position. It do not seemed to be well researched, if it...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Additionally
...ends which makes arguement to be flawed.Additionally, the director should have considered ot...
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Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... will be inadequate in dormitories which is based on the statistics shown by rese...
^^
Line 5, column 245, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
... the college, so that to make arguement more stronger and more believable. Due to lack of bel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13898305085 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89576457196 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518644067797 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.1734477923 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.6 119.503703932 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169709036527 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764222808836 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718527636387 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107903579667 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544018896355 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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