Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Even though many sociologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that traveling to forein countries is beneficial and is more advanteges, i firmly recommend that traveling in a country where people living at there is benefit. There are variouse culturs and difficult langouges in abroad countries that most of the people are not familier with them. In addition, people have to spend more money to traveling for exensive food, transortation, and hotels at there. And believe it or not, people can travel to thier country by spending less money and time. I will eleborate my idea with some significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my minds at first is taht when people dont have enough knowlesge and concepts of different culture of forien countries, they should go to thier own cities to travel where they growing up at there. As a personal experience to illustrate this statement, I use to travel to my country in the several different seasons such as North cities. never i have seen that fantastic place before. As a matter of fact, I was aware of the North cities' cultur and their langouge and i have never had problem at there. Not only did i make friends and go shoping more, but also did not problem to relationship with native people. As far as i am concerned, traveling is more benefit and enjoyable when you to be more relax at there for communicatin and aware of native people's cultur.
Another remarkable reason is that today, everything is more expensive and people can tolerate their prices. For improving this circumstance, it more economical that people travel in own country by spend less money. Needless to say, when people wants to go oversee they have to take a costly ticket and also booking it was not high price.hotels and eating food that are not traditional and they want to try more food at there. As an example, last year i went to Turkey and it was so expensive due to i have never gone there, thus, my to tour guide reserved a modern hotel for me. As you can, if i knew their pries i would rent a room in town where
As a result, all of the reasons that mentioned above are less convenience reasons which traveling in own country is more benefit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, thus, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60364648138 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3521397509 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296614294451 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106563460273 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716539007244 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198981021494 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479314810305 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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