Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
By and large, traveling is one the best way to seek true happiness. That is because it contributes to one's peace of mind through relieving their stress made by living within the hustle and bustle of the megacities, overcoming the mental pressure of the today's hectic life, and finding an opportunity to become fascinated by the stunning nature of this world. When it comes to this point, people have some debates as to where it is more beneficial for the people to go. One noteworthy point of view is that people benefit more from traveling in their own country that from traveling to the foreign country. I personally disagree with this statement, and it what follows two reasons will be discussed to shed light on this idea.
First and foremost, people find a great opportunity to become familiar with another culture in the world. It is crystal clear that our world is surrounded by a wide variety of cultures, and it goes without saying that the more we are aware of a culture, the more we are able to know the humanity. Consequently, not only do we know our world and its significance but also we can communicate with the human being more conveniently. My personal example is a compelling example of this situation. Last year, I went to China. In that country, there is a wide range of cultures, religions, and ritual celebrations. When I was there, I attend in many rituals, ate a lot of different food, and visit a plethora of historical places. As a result, I understood their nation better. After I came back, I had to go to a new room in the dormitory and I figured out that I have a Chinese roommate. As far as I was familiar with his country and culture, I was able to make a great relationship with him and spend a lot of quality time as well.
As a second valuable point to mention about traveling to the foreign country is that we can become aware of their history. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on this idea that history is full of precious lessons for us. We can utilize these lessons in our life and take advantages of them. For example, when I was in China, I figured out that they had been controlled by a cruel empire before revolution happened there. They were upset about their mean empire and they started to do their works and jobs inefficiently. In contrast, the following government was kind with Chinese people, so they appreciated it and helped to improve their country. When I came back, I figured out that being kind is one the vital behavior that can make people follow you. Therefore, when I joined the stuff of a company as a manager, I started to behave with employee kindly to make them follow my orders enthusiastically.
To wrap it up, the analysis of the aforementioned idea brings us to this point that the advantages of the traveling to foreign countries overweight the merits of traveling in our own country. That is because not only do we become familiar with another culture, but it also makes us aware of that country's history.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ness. That is because it contributes to ones peace of mind through relieving their s...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... spend a lot of quality time as well. As a second valuable point to mention abou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, in contrast, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57649253731 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69353108626 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46828358209 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5724577657 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.12 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.44 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299504156926 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744225440771 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104817033708 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189611702633 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865115188204 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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