Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People spend too much money on their pets, even though there can be other good ways to spend money.
Nowadays, pets have become the top concern of modern citizens. Recently, there is a heated debate on the money people spend on their pets, some claim that people should spend a lot of money on their pets. As for me, I believe that people spend too much money on their pets, but there are better ways to use this money, especially considering people's health and personal development.
Firstly, individuals spend money on their pets beyond the usual limit, which makes them ignore themselves. To be specific, they give their pets everything including expensive food, toys, medical insurance, and so on, but for themselves, they eat junk food and do not do on-time examinations. My friend Lucy’s experience is a compelling illustration of this, she has a cute dog, and she buys her dog beautiful cloth every month. Once she brought her dog out, it was a rainy day, so the mug made her dog's cloth dirty. She threw the cloth which cost her 100 dollars away and brought some new dresses immediately. Lucy wastes so much money on her pets, that the fancy clothes run out of her allowance, so she can only eat fast food every day. However, the unhealthy diet makes her stomach ache all the time, but she still does not have enough money to see a doctor; however, Lucy could have used the money to eat well and live a healthier life, if she does not spend too much money on her pets. Thus, I am convinced that people spend too much on their pets.
Furthermore, people should uplift themselves rather than squander money on pets. To be exact, wasting money on pets is pointless because people cannot obtain any substantial benefits from them. By contrast, money should be invested in activities that are conducive to personal fulfillment. For instance, some people take classes about communication, time management, and emergency reaction ability, which get their money's worth. With these skills they can handle assignments, deal with emergencies, and have a good relationship with their boss, which allows them to impress the managers and easily get promoted and earn more money; on the other hand, if people spend too much money on their pets, it is true that pets will provide us momentary solace, but the stress and worries from life and work will never disappear because of this. We could spend on pets appropriately, but it is more essential to put them in more important places. In a word, I think people spend too much money on their pets, nevertheless, they can use them in a better way.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed, I still maintain that people spend too much money on their pets, however, they should use the money on other better things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, as for, for instance, i think, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77370689655 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5161109516 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512931034483 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.45108366 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.578947368 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36842105263 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417433980545 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150232822362 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108665555238 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305768195869 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762052311436 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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