Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do.
Although the way people spend their leisure time is more a subjective matter than universal, some believe that people have tendency toward activities that are enjoyable rather than essential. I personally subscribe to the view that people spend more time on jobs they should spend. I cling to this standpoint for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.
To begin with, nowadays people spend more time working hard in their own professional field than they did in the past. To be more specific, there has been a growing trend toward spotting the individual’s abilities in recent years. Also, according to the researchers the more people are interested in their jobs, the more time they spend on their work. Hence, today, people insist on working hark more than any time, and I think the increasing growth of advancement in technology proves this fact.
Second, most of entertainments facilities we enjoy today improve other aspects of our lives, which means even the way we spend our leisure time brings about plenty of positive consequences to our lives. To put this in a more vivid picture, it has been about 5 years that I am used to running around the park nearby our home every night. As all we know, physical activities have remarkable influence in both physical and mental health status. Hence, although I enjoy running, this is the kind of job that I should do to boost the quality of my life.
To put all in a nutshell, I firmly believe that people spend more time on tasks they should do. I believe so because people are just more aware of their abilities, so spend more time on their works, and also because even enjoyable tasks are the way that people benefit greatly from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, second, so, i think, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78859060403 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53438361556 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536912751678 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.865067194 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.769230769 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234316727838 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949084062909 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867627538139 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147347995259 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403081852977 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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