Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
the growth of science has enabled us to do many things that we couldn't do in the last decades. we can now meet new people that are in a great distance from us. we can enter mysteries worlds through video games or movies. but all of these conveniences have a drawback. it is now much easier to lose track of time and completely forget to do the thing that helps our growth as an individual. I believe the average population spends way to much time on personal enjoyment and in this short essay, I'm going to explain my reasons for this claim.
to begin with, analyses show that we spend less time to read physical or digital books than ever before. and as you probably already know books are the pivotal source of acquiring knowledge. on the other hand, surveys show that we spend a great deal on social media. and from my own experience, I believe these statistics to be true.
furthermore, the average population curiosity to solve problems have decreased unimaginably. people these days are too depended on companies and I believe its all because they are busy with insignificant matters like video games and social media. the enjoyment of learning has completely replaced by addiction to entertainment. there so are so many young individuals that have no goals in life . all they think about is what are big new games that are going to release.
in conclusion, I personally believe that we have only so many time on this plan and we should not waste it on trivial matters like we do today.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1234.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 266.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63909774436 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59730199251 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3725867826 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.125 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244189145001 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643986294187 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784059435824 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13534244856 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715909424755 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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