Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that computer games should not be allowed to play because playing computer games is a waste of time. However, I do not agree with the prompt and think that it should not be proscribed for the following reasons.
First of all, computer games should be allowed since research has shown that computer games significantly enhance problem-solving skills in children. We know that the problem-solving skill is an indispensable part of the modern educational system, so in order to develop it, it should not be prohibited. For example, in our neighborhood, there is a boy who is very talented in mathematics. Retrospective to a few years back, when there was no internet, he was not good at mathematics. However, few months after the arrival of the internet, he began to play video games, as a result, gradually, he became very sharp-minded in solving mathematical problems. He himself credited the sharpness of his mind to computer games.
Second of all, computer games should not be proscribed because it improves concentration. Several studies have shown that computer games play a crucial role in ameliorating an individual's concentration power. For example, my brother had difficulties with concentration, he would not able to concentrate on one thing for a long time. But, when he started playing video games, his concentration power has significantly improved. Nowadays I found that his concentration power is crossed normal level. In contrast, I've never played video games, I only focus on my career, but my concentration level is decreased in the last few years. Compared to my brother, who is a keen computer games player, my concentration graph is moving downward. So it is important to play computer games.
Third of all, playing computer games is not a waste of time because it increases brain speed. In a survey in our college, those who play computer games regularly have higher brain speed. Since those who have a fast brain, they can do any task efficiently in any difficult situation. For example, in a natural disaster and a fire, we need fast decisions. Computer games may play a huge role in producing such manpower so it is indispensable. If we do not allow to play games, it can hamper the development of future high-speed brain functioning manpower. Hence computer game is not a waste of time and should be allowed to play.
In conclusion, children should not be proscribed to play computer games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... play a crucial role in ameliorating an individuals concentration power. For example, my b...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...r is crossed normal level. In contrast, Ive never played video games, I only focus ...
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Line 7, column 461, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
...it is indispensable. If we do not allow to play games, it can hamper the development of...
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Line 7, column 556, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...high-speed brain functioning manpower. Hence computer game is not a waste of time an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04197530864 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08520865127 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8307436027 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0833333333 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338510855746 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119825882488 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1172793879 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253104500492 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113569587844 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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