Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Toddlers ought not to play digital games of computer for long time. In my truthful opinion, the computer games waste a lot of time for the following reasons. Firstly, playing computer games for long time cause numerous types of addiction to computer. Secondly, that type of games increases health and mental problem.
To begin with, computer games should be ban for any child who play them for many hours without observation because it will be responsible for a lot of addictions behaviors. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Ten years ago, I had played games almost sixteen hours a day, this started my addiction to computer. This happened because of lacking of observation, moreover, it took many years to get heal of this disease. It was affecting my mind even I was barely eating. Computer games cause several types of addictions, if they are without any kind of caring.
Furthermore, playing computer games for numerous hours cause health problem like back pain or loss of sight and mental problem like increasing of violence behavior. For instance, I had one of my cousins his name Jon. Jon had been playing that game for long time a day for several years; therefor, he suffered from his back pain for that reason, he could not sleep well. Additionally, that problem led to another one; thus, he lost his vision because of the insomnia that he got. That is why computer games have several negative effects on our children.
In conclusion, playing games on computer waste a lot of time, and children should be ban of them for these reasons, they cause several addiction types, moreover, they affect our toddler physical health and mental health as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 286.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93706293706 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56247670428 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527972027972 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7632994679 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.25 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231790767256 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869368788975 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746945255025 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170038132173 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481291300027 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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