Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In todays modern world, playing games on the computer is very popular among children and on this they waste plenty of time. In my opinion, I personally believe that playing computer games should not be allocated for children. In the following essay I intend to put forth my arguments to support my view.
To begin with, playing computer games should not be allowed to young people because of this they do not pay attention their education. As computer games are very addicted which means once a young child start playing it, they keep on playing untill the game finishes. Therefore, they do not able to utilize enough time on their education and other important activities. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. My cousin was very shining student in his class and usually got A grades. However, when his friend introduced him with a computer game Bandicoot crash, he got into it very much. He was badly obessessed with the game that he wanted to win the game everytime he played. As a result, his performance in the school started to decline as he wasted a plethora of time over it. Consequently, it is better that young people should not be allowed to play computer games.
In addition, playing a lot of computer games has negative effects on human health. The screen of computer emits harmful radiations which badly effects on the eye muscles. Moreover, continuously using computer for long time makes the body muscles stiff. This make children very lazy and they are not good to do anything. To exemplify, my friend was accustomed to play every day in a park because of which she was very healthy and active. When the computer games were becoming very popular she asked her parents to get one for her. She played games very mcuh on the computer and because of this her habit of playing in the park was diminished. As a result, she became fat and lazy and her health was very poor. This would not have happened if she never played too much games on computer.
In conclusion, I firmly agree with the statement that computer games is a time waste activity and children should not be allowed for it. This is because, games are very much addicted due to which youngsters do not pay attention to education, and because it is not beneficial for a person health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70822942643 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5003180748 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471321695761 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6285816345 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.0869565217 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4347826087 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339367977261 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112569591969 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954759681881 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241680566113 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417335669052 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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