Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Providing Internet access is just as important as other services, such as building roads, so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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It is undoubtedly true that technological advancements, especially the invention of the Internet, had provided modern people with much more comfortable and convenient lives. I am of the opinion that governments should regard the Internet access as one of the necessary infrastructures without paying fees.
To begin with, the provision of the Internet can benefit all citizens everywhere without being interfered by global or local issues, such as the outbreak of diseases and the lockdown due to disasters. That is, the those who live in much remote areas can still acquire the latest information and knowledge that students need. Take the remote education during the pandemic for example, students and workers will have a higher tendency of contracting Covid-19 due to the contact with their peers and colleagues. If the Internet is available to all citizens in the society, the function of the education and working system could still act successfully. The external factors will never become a hindrance that pose a negative consequence to people’s lives.
Secondly, the offering of the Internet can gradually eliminate the gap between students who live in the downtown and remote areas because of the discrepancy of the educational resources. It is because that there are numerous interacting applications utilized to connect students with the material that students need to learn. In addition, other professional experts and educators can directly deliver the professional message and information which is relatively limited in the far-away areas. My own example is a compelling example of this. When I was a remote tutor online as a volunteer, I was assigned to two teenagers to take of their academic performance and mental development. Because their parents all left their hometown to earn higher salary, it turned out that students there are in shortage of companying and guidance to their studies. After the instruction for almost six months, these two young children started to garner acclaimed academic performance from both their teachers and parents. It is because the pouring of online assistance that instruct them to a promising future.
In conclusion, the access to the Internet could provide society with benefits that are as necessary as other infrastructures. Not only because the remoted areas wouldn’t be interrupted by accidents but also governments could bridge and narrow down the urban-rural gap
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in short, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40789473684 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99893088143 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557894736842 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4926982511 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.882352941 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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