Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a growing trend that societies require youth to follow unacceptable rules. Some people state that young people should keep rules even if they are strict, whereas others disagree with this opinion. I agree with the former view for the following reasons.
First, there is a widely held perception in my country that rules and regulations are so obsolete that everyone does not want to obey. Of course, they seemed to be reasonable when they were established. However, they are no longer practical since our societies are changing dramatically. For instance, the government determined that the minimum wage based on living expenses 30 years ago. Even though the past 2 decades witnessed significant technological and economical growth, the regulation remains the same as ever before. As a result, our salaries were stable and a long-term recession was observed.
Second, keeping needless rules puts additional pressure on university students, which will cause chronic mental disorders. This is due to the fact that the expectation to follow regulations makes them feel anxious and youngsters are easily overwhelmed. Take my brother as an example. Students in his high school were expected to follow strict regulations such as forcing all students to belong to baseball clubs and not allowing them to use bicycles. As a result, they were swamped with their obligations and this made it harder to concentrate on their studies. It goes without saying that quite a few students suffered from a long-term illness.
Third, it is well-known fact that prohibiting violent movies for teenagers has prevailed for 10 years, which resulted in deteriorating the freedom of expression. Of course, some of them will be highly likely to feel terrible when harmful scenes are broadcasted. Nevertheless, young people have the right to watch them and producers also have been guaranteed to express their opinion. For example, a study by Oxford University shows that a large number of film companies in my country moved to the U.S. This is due to the fact that the government banned filming violent movies. Consequently, theaters are dominated by simple and monotonous movies. This eventually shows how traditional rules have a negative impact on our society.
Given that strict rules astonishingly affect our lives, we should change the rules into compelling ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...witnessed significant technological and economical growth, the regulation remains the same...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...a study by Oxford University shows that a large number of film companies in my country moved to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, third, well, whereas, as for, for example, for instance, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28723404255 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81876753743 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603723404255 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7373480522 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3636363636 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0909090909 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183406556271 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471393251908 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580063974614 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113179222312 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946549542199 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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