Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The existence of the rules is a dispensable part of human society. They are in fact, prerequisites of discipline, which can make the people of society feel safe and comfortable, causing the society to thrive. Many believe that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. I completely disagree with this notion, for many reasons, some of which are elaborated here.
The first reason is that in most parts of the worlds religious and traditional beliefs are fading away. Religions have many strict rules that limit people considerably. In the past, religion played an important rule in societies, and the church was the omnipotent ruler. Pop and the priests imposed strict rules and enforced them strictly. It had also affected the tradition. All people were expected to behave in certain ways. If somebody tried to break a widely accepted traditional rule, the community would act severely. The people even may have expelled the person from the city. After the renaissance, European societies changed dramatically. The societies became more open and rules became softer. This trend has continued in many countries until now. For instance, the relationships between unmarried boys and girls was once a taboo. Now, even in my country, Iran, which is a traditional country, people are getting adapted to the changes, accepting such behaviors. So, overall societies have become less strict than before.
Alongside what we discussed above, technological advancements are happening rapidly in recent years. It has increased the rate at which cultural diversity is taking place in different areas of the globe. Each year there are thousands of new movies being produced in different countries, movies which in fact, advertise new cultures. On the other hand, the internet has provided people with a lot of knowledge, and social media has connected many people together, reducing the distances. All of these have made people's ideas to develop, and to be even more similar, enabling the society to understand the young better. Today many behaviors that were once a taboo, are beginning to be accepted by the society. For instance, now people do not reprimand transsexuals.
According to what we discussed, although many may disagree, modern societies are imposing fewer restrictions, especially on young people. Not only the religious restrictions are gone, but also people have become more aware and open-minded.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 42, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...ccording to what we discussed, although many may disagree, modern societies are imposing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, as to, for instance, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28717948718 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77433172175 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587179487179 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.763443197 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3703703704 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4444444444 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237247008425 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604396145709 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872332685514 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146763715519 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896013010246 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.81 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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