Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school.
School-age children are a big responsibility for parents that they take different ways to encourage their beloved kids to study their lessons. Opinions are divided on whether and to what extent children should be offered money for each high mark they get or not. Personally, I strongly believe that there is no shortage of the idea of giving money to children-students if they get high grades. In the ensuing lines, two concrete reasons have been stated to elaborate on my standpoint of view.
The first remarkable reason to clarify my outlook is that offering money to kids encourages them to study hard and get better marks, which transform lazy kids into hardworking ones. In other words, money acts as a motivator to enhance children’s efforts in both school and home to study well. My nephew, for example, is an apt illustration of this. He used to postpone his homework and do not pay attention in classes that his teachers had a big concern regarding his final exams whether my nephew is able to pass them or not. Consequently, his father made a deal with him that for any high mark, my nephew will get 100 dollars. As a result, my nephew started studying day and night, such a hardworking that resulted in passing final exams with high grades. Had his father not offer him money for getting high marks, he never even passed final exams, let alone getting high grades.
The second worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that giving money to children after obtaining high grades gives them a sense of being useful and independent in childhood. To be more specific, receiving money for the work they have done, teaches them how to be independent through earning money. My own experience is a compelling clarification on this. Being a straight-A student, I used to receive money for every high mark so I could save some money every semester. As a consequence, I would be able to have something on my own that gave me more independence since I had not to turn to anybody even my parents to have them. Had I never received that money from my parents, I never had my independence in my childhood to purchase something by myself. Therefore, the more money they receive, the more will they independent.
In light of what has been discussed, I strongly reinforce the idea that students receive money for each high grade because, acting as a motivator, it transforms lazy kids into hardworking ones. Besides, children become more independent in their childhood and it teaches them the role of money in independence.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80184331797 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75816364851 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497695852535 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5146637996 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.2 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297734563234 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973592372264 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737355521953 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202567398248 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854066892472 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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