Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
A person gets influenced by someone based on how their relationship is with the other person influencing them. I would like to illustrate this with an example of my own, I am more likely to get influenced by my sister who is 6 years older to me, than my other sister who is the same age as me. It is because she is older than me so I gave higher regard to her opinions. I think we all, including students, give more weight and are more likely to get influenced by those who are a higher authority to us in our relationship with them. Thus,I definitely agree with the statement that students get more influenced by teachers than friends. I agree with it for the following two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, I think students are more likely to be influenced by teachers than their friends because students take the opinions of their teachers in high regard. Students think that their teachers have mentored many students and have more experience in life. They take them as their role models unlike their friends so whatever they say about them or suggest to them is definitely true. Thus, they are more likely to be influenced by their teachers. For example, A student is planning to take up a job after his graduation. He is so sure about doing a job. But, when he talked to his teacher about it, he changed his plans. His teacher suggested to him that he might not be ready to enter the corporate world and instead, he should apply to a doctorate program because he is the right fit for it. The student got convinced easily by his teacher and changed the plans he was sure to do. Had a friend suggested the same, he would not have considered his suggestion because he thinks that his friend does not know much about this world better than his teacher.
Furthermore, students think that teachers are a higher authority to them whereas they are at the same level as their friends so when someone of a higher authority says them something about them or suggests them something, there are more chances that they might take their teachers’ opinions seriously. Also, students are well taught by their parents about the dangers of peer pressure. So, students are always cautious while listening to the opinions of their peers. Thus, they do not believe or get influenced by their friends’ easily as they do with their teachers.
To sum up, I think students get more persuaded by those who are at a higher level to them and have more experience in life than others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, i think, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60356347439 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4971687978 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432071269488 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2258484962 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4285714286 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.380952381 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441492725418 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155366235831 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114920346603 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265705594044 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084619931902 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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